My Blood Is Tired

[Jim]

On the way to school today my sister was being funny and said that her blood was tired. Later I got bored and started writing, this is what came out, and I feel like sharing it.

My Blood Is Tired

Splattering on the ground,
my blood was tired of going round.
This blade I hold in my hand,
A path that seemed so grand.

It was not a shortcut to the end,
but a path to a new beginning.
The truth it did bend,
To get out was its' yearning.

My blood is tired of escaping,
the volumous fountain has finished.
The deep red liquid is pooling,
All it's actions subdued.

[Tami]

Well done, redrum; you've painted a picture of metaphors-making it seem as though it is only the blood of which you speak, when in reality it is also (and if not moreso) the person.

Keep writing <img src=\'http://www.killanet.net/forum3/public/s ... /smile.gif\' class=\'bbc_emoticon\' alt=\':)\' />

[Jim]

Ty ada. <img src=\'http://www.killanet.net/forum3/public/s ... /blush.gif\' class=\'bbc_emoticon\' alt=\'(blush)\' />

[Vercz]

[color=\"green\"]ooo0o0o0ooo...another writer <img src=\'http://www.killanet.net/forum3/public/s ... >/blum.gif\' class=\'bbc_emoticon\' alt=\':P\' />


great work red <img src=\'http://www.killanet.net/forum3/public/s ... >/good.gif\' class=\'bbc_emoticon\' alt=\'(Y)\' /> lots of feeling/emotion in that piece <img src=\'http://www.killanet.net/forum3/public/s ... iggrin.gif\' class=\'bbc_emoticon\' alt=\':D\' />[/color]

[Jim]

ty vercz, this is what school does to me...good writing. <img src=\'http://www.killanet.net/forum3/public/s ... #>/dry.gif\' class=\'bbc_emoticon\' alt=\'<_<\' />